Peer Review 7

Hi Louise,

I really enjoyed reading your blog! The flow of your poem is very good and it was very easy to read. The line “Death surrounding, screams at each ear” heavily impacted me as it reminded me of the poem, “Nigger’s Leap” by Judith Wright and the film “Apocalypse Now” as your poem reminds me of both suffering and war. The only thing I will comment on is just watch your grammar in your opening paragraph as there was a line or two that i had to reread to understand. Apart from that, wonderful blog.

https://louiselyons1.wordpress.com/2016/05/18/week-11-blog-8/comment-page-1/#comment-16

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Peer View 6

https://felicitymcmanus.wordpress.com/2016/05/06/6th-blog/comment-page-1/#comment-5

Hi Felicity,

I really enjoyed reading your 1st person perspective of the character’s anger of the Appin Massacre. I’m not sure if this was on purpose but i really liked how the sentence structure of being very blunt and short, this made the tone seem outraged. I feel that the persona is very personal to the insight of the Indigenous Australians which is a pressure to read a post from the time period that there was disgust among the white settlers over this issue. I also like the concept that you place at the end of unity that we all apart of “Human Nature”. Well done on your blog, I really enjoyed reading it!

Peer Review 5

Hi Rachel,

I completely agree with your post about how lady comes to a bittersweet conclusion in the end of the poem and how the last stanza does show the change of the lady’s thought and opinion. Also your writing style is very good and I like how clear your sentences are and how the sentences flow really well together! It was a pleasure to read. The only thing I will say is I’d like a further discussion on the biblical reference as Gilmore is referring another piece of work with the phrase “Eve span”. But apart from that, I really enjoyed reading your post this week and look forward to reading more of them in the future.

https://rachelbarker2016.wordpress.com/2016/04/29/week-8-eve-song/comment-page-1/#comment-12

Peer Review 4

Hi Vanessa

firstly I must say you have beautiful writing style and your set up of your blog is very easy to follow and understand. I completely agree with your comments on John Glover’s piece Ullswater early morning and that it does show his appreciation for Australian landscape and that the contrast between the light and dark tones of the scenery does highlight the beauty of the land. Which that style of painting is often found in English Romantic artworks, the comment I would say is I’d link it back to English style of paintings in the 19th century. Apart from that, your blog was a joy to read and keep up the good work!

https://vanessafazio.wordpress.com/2016/04/18/engl200-blog-4/comment-page-1/#comment-22

Peer Review 3

https://ngaireale1.wordpress.com/2016/04/22/week-6-blog-4/comment-page-1/#comment-9

Hi Ngaire,

firstly you explore and explained the context of the poems “A Mid-Summer Noon in the Australian Forest” and “Bell-Birds” extremely well. I do agree with your comment about the Bell-Birds being a symbol for Kendall’s childhood, I would also add that it also could be a contrast to the meaning of Blue Birds in England as they were often used in children’s nursery rhymes as a motif of tranquility and that Kendall was using the Bell-Birds as a replacement.

The only thing I would recommend is doing a grammar and punctuation check of your writing as there were a few minor errors which weren’t too obvious. I say this from personal experience as I have to do multiple checks.

Apart from that, I really enjoyed your perspective on Harpur and Kendall’s poetry and how you set out your blog with images of the poets separating the paragraphs as it allowed me to see that a new idea was about to be portrayed.

Look forward to reading more of your blogs and keep up the good work!

Peer Review 2

https://louiselyons1.wordpress.com/2016/03/24/week-4-blog-2/comment-page-1/#comment-1

Hi Louise,
I do agree with your discussion of Oodgeroo Noonuccal’s importance in Australian Literature as she was an important figure during the 1980’s with her poetry. The only comment I will say about your blog is that your quote from No More Boomerang needs to be a little more clearer as i had to re-read the sentence to understand your concept. Either drop to a new line or have a break after the end of the quote.

Apart from that, very nice piece to read and keep up the good work!

1 Peer Review

https://dinahsimon.wordpress.com/2016/03/18/blog-1/comment-page-1/#comment-4

Hi Dinah,
written very well with convincing ideas about utilitarianism and the how Australia has become into a materialistic society which i completely agree with as most first world countries have become like this. The comment I will say is just make your references could be a little clearer but apart from that very good insight into Australian Literature.