I really enjoyed reading your blog! The flow of your poem is very good and it was very easy to read. The line “Death surrounding, screams at each ear” heavily impacted me as it reminded me of the poem, “Nigger’s Leap” by Judith Wright and the film “Apocalypse Now” as your poem reminds me of both suffering and war. The only thing I will comment on is just watch your grammar in your opening paragraph as there was a line or two that i had to reread to understand. Apart from that, wonderful blog.