Peer Review 5

Hi Brianna,
I really enjoyed reading your blog on Virginia Woolf this week and found that your post does capture the essence of what Woolf wanted to portray within her works. I liked how you broke Woolf’s work down into two separate ideologies and that made it very easy to understand what Virginia Woolf was trying convey to her audience. The only negative that I have to say is the lack of your own opinions and how Woolf could relate to you or some experiences you have had. I did find when reading this blog that there was no personal thoughts or ideas about Woolf herself which I would of liked to have seen. The only real connection between you and Woolf I found was the small paragraph at the end, next time with your analysis you could add your own opinions or beliefs regarding the context of the post. Apart from that, I have gain a much deeper understanding of Woolf through your work and have enjoyed reading your post. Good work!! Riley

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Blog 7, Week 8

 Write a letter to Katherine Mansfield thanking her for her insight into the condition of women.

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Dear Katherine Mansfield,

Firstly, I would like to state that I very much enjoyed reading work The Daughters of the Late Colonel. The depth of the two sisters brought the work to life and it created an atmosphere of lost and hope. Though these two notions do contradict one another, I thoroughly adored the way that the sisters find hope in being loss without their father.

In particular, the imagery of the birds created in the last scene was fundamental in establishing the outcome of the two sisters I believe. The notion of the young birds being trapped inside the cage is symbolic of the sisters of how they were confined in the authority of their father and that they become lost without the structure that their father created for them. In a way, I feel very similar to the two sisters as my life is structured like them. In my own life, my father is the head figure of our house and his opinion and rules are like law for all of us. Although he is not a dictator and is very open to my siblings and myself, I too like the sisters would feel very lost without him telling us what to do and how to behave in certain environments.  So at the end of the story with the sisters both forgetting what they were about to say, I can understand the situation because their household completely relied on their father telling what to do and how they should behave.

Also with the ending of the novel, I found it quite interesting how you created a beautiful imagery of freedom but then destroyed it as a way to show the insecurities of the girls and how they are unsure what to do with the sensation of freedom yet but having this image ruined, it displays the vulnerability of the girls. This element of vulnerability is so important in your work and I believe it was critical in literature in this time period due to the need and rise of feminism.

Kind Regards

Riley Powers

Blog 6, Week 8

This week Michael said to us that we could create our own topics. More or less I have decided to reflect on the style of my writing and that I need to be more careful in the way that I portray my thesis and arguments. Because of the way I write, I can cause my arguments to contradict with one another, therefore making my works unclear and not convincing to a marker or to any audience.

After gaining feedback from the previous blogs and our essay results, I understand that I have to go through my works more carefully as my grammar has caused a bit of confusion. In particular, my arguments have become almost twisted due to the style of writing that I have so now reflecting on the blog critics, I will have to go through each work thoroughly before I post it.

One area of my essay I contradicted myself was the body paragraph in which I discussed Wilford Owen’s poem Anthem of Doomed youth”. I have now rewritten it for my benefit so that I can allow the audience or marker to understand it more clearly.

Owen causes the audience to question the relevance of religion in modern life. In particular, is religion fundamental in survival in war. This creates an atmosphere of chaos and despair, Owen highlighting the true experience that the soldiers did have through his own personal experiences. Owen does this to show the true nature of war to his audience without glorifying death and patriotism. With the line “Shall shine the holy glimmers of goodbyes” the imagery created emphases the irony of religion played in war and how it can be seen as relevant. Therefore, Owen does portray his own opinion and experiences of war through this poem to audience allowing them to understand the situation and atmosphere of what the trenches were like.

Peer Review 4

Hi Natasha,

I very much enjoyed reading your blog. Grammatically your work was extremely good and I found it very easy to understand and gain your perspective of the artwork Nude in a Rocking Chair. I quite like how you have styled your post as you gave a little background information of your understanding of the work, personally I would of liked to have read more background information on the work and Picasso such as “Why was he renowned for his abstract style of painting” and “Why did he play an important role in Modernism”. But I did like how you summarised the main ideas of the meaning of the work in bullet points in regards to Modernism, it made it very easy to understand. In the end of your post, I would of liked to know more of your own views on Picasso and the work or maybe you could of answered the rhetorical questions that you did ask. Overall your blog was insightful and easy to understand, good work. Riley

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Blog 5, Week 7

Near the end of Eliot’s “The Waste Land” he writes

“These fragments I have shored against my ruin”.

In the spirit of Eliot’s vision of the world, write a poem or a short prose passage that uses this line as its opening.

 

These fragments I have shored against my ruin

The darkness building up inside of me

The daemons from Rome rising beneath

Yet no one around can understand or see.

Glaring to right the darkness is there

Blanket of stars will not save me now

Squealing women wandering the path

Yelling and screaming being fools

Ladies take a bow!

 

These women taunt me

They have no real purpose

The Bible showed us Eve

The “perfect” woman

That did no good but all harm

Being deceitful

Showing us their charm.

Darkness within me is because of them

Their lying nature tricked us all

Ask poor Adam,

As he took his grand fall.

Now we’re damned for eternity

She is to blame

All women are alike

Eve’s now fanning the flame

 

Her sin is his sin

One that I must carry now

Through the darkness to infernum

It’s all over now

I tried to write in the style of T.S.Elliot and attempted in embody this life experiences of his hatred for women due to his failed marriage. I like how Elliot plays with religious elements within his works because I believe he tries to make references to failures with in history and how he believes women as second level when compared to men. Similar to traditional views of women, I wanted to express a misogynist view of the 1950’s.

Peer Review 3

Hi Daniel, I really liked your blog post about Paul Cezanne’s “Banks of the Marne”, I enjoyed your reasoning for why it left an impression on you. The only thing I’d like to comment on is your statement “Artists such as Picasso, Van Gogh, Lucien Freud and Paul Cezanne were prominent icons in this Modernist movement”. Why were they prominent artists and what made them so well known in the art world? Just a another sentence on that or two would make the blog flow better as you jump from this statement into Cezanne’s work without any further discussion. Also I’d recommend you go into more detail about the context of the work. When I describe an artwork in blogs or essays, I like to imagine that the audience is blind and that you need to create this image for them. Apart from that, keep up the good work.

 

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Blog 4, Week 6

Discuss the work in the gallery that left the deepest impression on you. Can you describe the work in detail and say why it left that impression on you?

One of the works that I found the most interesting at the NSW Art Gallery was the Nude in a Rocking Chair by Pablo Picasso in 1956 as in relationship to this topic, I believe it conveyed the true meaning of Modernism.

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The abstract painting itself is of a faceless woman, depicted in only black and white, sitting in a rocking chair that has horn like arms. The chair is painted a medium pastoral green  that continues the top of the work. With the rest of the space being blocked out by a bold red, yellow and black. One part of the work that I don’t completely understand is why in the top left hand corner, Picasso has left a square of white with a blue plant  inside it. I felt that I only noticed it the plant after looking at the work for a while and that it could draw away the attention of the nude lady for some of the audience. I spoke to my friend Natasha about this work a day or so after the visit, she stated that the plant was the way that her interest was drawn to the painting and that she didn’t see the lady initially.

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One of the reasons that I feel that this work left more of an impact on me was I have studied Picasso in Art throughout the majority of my school life. I highly appreciate the ways in which Picasso uses colour and forms to create his subject matter and the way that he is able deliberate his emotions through his works. Although when I first think of Picasso this work does not come to mine first but rather his works such as The Weeping Lady or Guernica which do depict more realistic images and notions. However Nude in a Rocking Chair does make the audience delve deeper in to thought about conceptional message being created.

Images from:

http://www.artgallery.nsw.gov.au/collection/works/66.1981/

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Guernica_(Picasso)

Peer Review 2

Hi Maz, I really enjoyed reading your blog this week! One thing I’d like to comment on is your grammar, just make sure you proofread your work before you post it. I did find it very interesting that your “quiet” space was your local park and I liked how you thought of an example that most people would understand within your own context. I did find it a tad ironic because the chronicles of Narnia were written in the early/mid 20th century. Great work and keep it up!

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Blog 3, Week 5

With reference to the way Paul tries to comfort young 19-year-old Kemmerich on his deathbed, describe how you might respond to a close friend who is going through the same experience.

In the novel, All Quiet on the Western Front, Paul is confronted with many ordeals but one of the most memorable was the death of his school friend Kemmerich. The reaction to Kemmerich’s death, Paul begins to question his place and meaning in life. In particular; Paul starts to question the meaning of war as well as see the downside to war. If I were in that same situation of Paul during the first World War, I probably would have a strong retaliation to a close friend of mine dying. My reaction to death would not have been as composed Paul’s as personally I don’t cope well with death; I grieve very openly. But in a time of war, I feel that my reaction to death would become similar to Paul’s due to Paul is being completely surrounded by death. The constant threat of death I believe change the way that I looked at life and death, in a way I feel that I would gain a higher appreciation for life and regard death as the norm.

One part of Paul’s reaction to death I found quite interesting was the way he thought about the boots then also the way he selectively spoke to Kemmerich about them. The way that Paul views the shoes is almost desperate because he internally he discusses the worth of the boots and almost disregards that they are Kemmerich’s; although he says anything to Kemmerich unlike the Paul’s comrades. I think in a situation of war, I would act in a similar way as decent boots were seen as a luxury in the trenches but unlike Paul, I would view it more a survival element rather than a luxury.